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well now..

ill just note stuff while listning.

i like the bell in the beginning, but the synth coming in at .17-.18 is a little empty imo.
nice effects and scratching, very subtle crossovers.

masting is pro.
great breakdown at 1.36

oncemore, the synth at 1.53 is pale. id eigher cover it up with another melody, or modify the sound

the song in general, gorgeous. great job

hmmmmmm

good song, i feel the vibe, but you might wanna throw in more background noises, a high pitch bell, a drop of water falling, anything like that.

whats always soothing is humming. adding different layers of pitch makes the song fuller, thus easier on the ears

thats it, keep it up

oddfellowfloyd responds:

...thank you for the constructive criticism, mate! I can always rework this again, and give it another go.

Check out Apex Twin's "Stone In Focus". Great meditiative track, sparse, but so very full and grand. :)

here we go

right, ill just be taking notes as i go.

first thing up, i find the melody a little too stale in the beginning, even for drum and bass. not interesting enough in a way. This isnt really something you can change anymore, but thats what this song needs to be introduced to the pro's..
Next time though, i'd go with a wider range of chords.

I really like the classical aspect, but the last switch on 3.40 (with the brass synth introduced) was not the best choice one could make, id go for a more natural sound there.

finnally, the bass is too heavy, (first up on .40, when you hold one bass note, its annoying, id concider taking a lower note, one that doesnt have that overdrive sound (im not sure how to put this)

Great song, the mixed genre thing is an aspect more and more aspiring artist experiment with, yours is defenitely one that turned out succesfull. Keep it up

if you need some good ol' fashioned criticism on your future works of art, just lemme know
Thats all folks!

merlin responds:

Your reviews are always my favorite. I love how you always offer great advice for improvement, but in a constructive way. It really does help a lot. It's definitely a fine balance of giving and taking when composing a song, and you really give me a view of the bigger picture, and I'm really grateful for that. You've definitely given me some things to consider! Thank you!

dude..

nice

PaperBat responds:

Nope, you gotta make fun of him

mmm

nice voice you have, not very well sung though.. but its okay.

mmm

i like the sound, but it could use some more drums and perc.. the raw feel is kinda there, but i think you can do even better :)

i think an alien just landed here hehe

Shan83 responds:

oh yes...after 2 years I can definitely say "I could have made it better" ;)
but...you know,, first compositions always lack of depth and complexity :P
thank you for the vote!!
x

mmmm

not bad, not bad, the clarinet is indeed very mustering, nice work

mmm

the violins have a very slow attack, it kinda kills the song for me, especially when the violins play faster. id decrease the attack

1.20 the song lacks depth and seem to take on a completely different ambience opposing the song, not a very succesfull solo.

in general its not bad, has a nice feel to it! keep the above in mind though

SuperFlonic responds:

I can only agree with that. I couldn't figure out how to adjust the attack on GPO. Would be great if I could get some assistance.

mmmm

nice intro, lyrics are terrible. the woozy voice really fits in with the ambiance..

could use a little more melody, since your voice isnt the best filler. not bad throwing in the second octave voice, thats a nice touch.

not bad

giovanni808 responds:

i got the idea from my crazy wristwatch :) Lyrics doesn't really make any sense.

mmmmmm

the vocals are better here. the lyrics are better.
i like the flute, it really adds value here.

the piano is well composed, but id recommend using more instruments instead of a double piano play..

giovanni808 responds:

I am still finding my way of singing. I haven't singed for a long time, and my voice just stopped acting teenagerly. And here I actually made a better text instead of remember you. I like the double piano play :3 There is missing some instruments, but I can't put a finger on which.

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